Tilting the description

1. I walked into my kitchen, and just stopped for a second and just looked around. This was the room that is the most lived-in and where everything happened, and it was definitely beginning to show the wear and tear of all that living. The warm, sun-kissed brown of the cupboards once kept the room feeling friendly and inviting, but now just make it look old and worn. On top of the fridge in one of the five crystal vases, the bright, sunshine- yellow daffodils add extra color and brightness to the room seriously lacking in life and color. Besides the daffodils, the top of the refrigerator is full of other plants and crystal vases in various shapes and sizes, mismatched and uncertain. The almond-colored refrigerator itself is full of old school pictures, including the bad ones, the ones that should be hidden away, out of sight. Everyone has a picture like that, with half-closed eyes or a bad smile that mothers everywhere, for some unknown, incredibly humiliating reason, just insist on displaying for the world to see. Colorful, unique magnets from past trips and vacations dot the fridge here and there, holding up important papers that should really be kept elsewhere, where they won’t get lost and ruined, and bright, vivid pictures drawn in elementary art classes at school that look as young and immature as the artists who drew them Toward the bottom of the fridge is a basketball sized red, black, and white magnet advertising Florida State that looks completely out of place in this kitchen. The countertops around the kitchen are continually cluttered with baskets, flowers, bills, and letters of various shapes, sizes, and colors. This clutter makes the room look messy and unkempt, like someone forgot to clean it for about three weeks. . It’s a messy room and certainly isn’t the normal idea of perfection. The dog can often be found wandering around in here, waiting for someone to pet his soft, silky fur or scratch behind his floppy ears, which consequently leaves dog hair scattered around the kitchen; on the floors and furniture, making the room truly as dirty as it looks.

Essay 2 Ideas

I've been doing some serious thinking about my topic for the second essay, and I can't really decide if I want to profile a person or a place. I think that a person would be harder to profile, but if done the right way, it could be good. But I'm leaning more toward profiling a place. This summer I met some new friends and we hung out at an old apartment building that one of them owned. This building has had many different uses over the years and is just an interesting building. We played games like ditchem and capture the bag in that old building, and I can't help thinking that it would be kind of fun to profile one of the rooms of that building. I really wish I could do the whole thing, but I think to kep it narrow enough I'm going to have to pick just one room. The problem is, which one? There are so many different possibilities with it. I'm kind of excited for this essay. I can't say that there's really anything overly special about this building, but it is interesting and I've had some good times there.

Add some pizzazz

1.) The candy dish sat on the counter.

The candy dish, overflowing with colorful candy of all shapes and sizes, sat on the counter.

2.) Hubert ran to the store to get a block of cheese.

Hubert, suddenly hungry for a grilled cheese sandwich, ran to the store to get a block of cheese.

3.) Ivan worried, about his job and his coworkers, his family problems, and most of all about school, his worry keeping him awake tossing and turning all night.

Sentence Variety

This was a really hard assignment!

1.) Some shoes are expensive.
Different, unique colors, style designs, and designers, are all factors that make some shoes expensive.

2.) Now, however, my views have changed.
Now, however, my views have changed considerably towards my shoes in the way that I view them and their different, unique qualities.

3.) By the end of the school year, my shoes were completely worn out from continual use and wear.
By the end of the school year, my shoes, scuffed and full of holes, were completely worn out from continual use and wear.

Showing Not Telling

The classroom was cold. At first, it didn’t seem to be so; it wasn’t the obvious slam-you-in-the-face cold, like walking outside in the middle of January is. No, this cold was the slower, more subtle kind, the kind that isn’t noticeable at first but slowly creeps up on a person until that cold chill is all that they can think about. This cold doesn’t produce an immediate reaction; it takes slightly longer to be recognized. It begins with the slight feeling of discomfort and not really knowing what that discomfort is. Then it progresses to unconsciously rubbing arms, slowly at first and then faster and more frequently, trying to warm them. At this stage most people don’t realize what’s happening to them. Goosebumps appear. This is when the arm rubbing really escalates, hand rubbing is added to the reaction, and even feet begin to feel the cold despite the fact that they’re layered in socks and tennis shoes.

Hooks For Belief Essay

1.) Why do women have so many shoes?
2.) Shoes are a girl's best friend.
3.) The average American woman owns 19 pairs of shoes.
4.) Heels, Nike's, and flip-flops: women are obsessed with shoes.
5.) Billions of different shoes are made every day.
6.) The real difference between men and women are shoes. Women simply need more
shoes than their male counterparts-nineteen pairs to be exact.
7.) Shoes may seem like a small part of life but they can represent something much bigger.
8.) I have 10 pairs of shoes in my closet. The average woman has 19.
9.) It may seem like shoes provide the simple service of covering our feet, but in fact they can
provide much more than that.
10.) I love my shoes. Most women love their shoes. That's just a fact of life.